Bug 114337

Summary:

minor grammar nits to handbook/x11 chapter

Product:

Documentation

Reporter:

minimarmot <minimarmot>

Component:

Books & Articles

Assignee:

Marc Fonvieille <blackend>

Status:

Closed FIXED

Severity:

Affects Only Me

Priority:

Normal

Version:

Latest

Hardware:

Any

OS:

Any

Attachments:

Description	Flags
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Description minimarmot 2007-07-05 19:50:01 UTC

I attach a patch with a number of small changes, which I detail here

o the first change is an attempt to make the sentence relating X11, XOrg and XFree86 more parse-able.  This is difficult for me, because I'm not entirely sure what the relationships are, myself.  X.org claims (http://www.x.org/wiki/) that ``The X.Org Foundation provides an open source implementation of the X Window System''; presumably XFree86 does as well.  This change reverses the inclusion so that the two softwares include the X11 protocol, not the other way around (which doesn't make much sense)

o XDM controlled-->XDM-controlled: more hyphenation issues that I'm not 100% certain about; Marc Fonvieille is (hopefully) looking into this some more (controlled is a past participle here, right?)

o the login-->login: either ``the chooser screen'' and ``the login screen'', or ``the chooser and login screens''.  

o edit-->you must edit: the text is telling the user what to do

o [Xaccess]: a bit of style change (show the relation between two sentences), and close off the sentence with why users may wish to consult more documentation.

o [add commas to list]

o represents-->is: Konqueror is a browser, not a picture of one

o FreeBSD-KDE-->FreeBSD KDE: style (?) I'm not sure what a hyphen adds here, and I couldn't find this term on the referenced webpage

o etc. is an abbreviation

o other things-->more: ``other things'' just feels like the wrong tone for this piece, to me

Fix: patch attached

Patch attached with submission follows:
How-To-Repeat: http://www.freebsd.org/doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/x11.html
and the rest of the chapter

Comment 1 Marc Fonvieille freebsd_committer

2007-07-06 09:01:41 UTC

Responsible Changed
From-To: freebsd-doc->blackend

I'll take care of this one.

Comment 2 Marc Fonvieille freebsd_committer

2007-07-09 13:00:42 UTC

State Changed
From-To: open->closed

I committed a slightly different version of your patch.  In fact I 
updated the name of the FreeBSD KDE team to match what is used on 
http://freebsd.kde.org/, i.e, "KDE on FreeBSD team". 
Thanks.

Comment 3 dfilter service freebsd_committer

2007-07-09 13:00:44 UTC

blackend    2007-07-09 12:00:38 UTC

  FreeBSD doc repository

  Modified files:
    en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/x11 chapter.sgml 
  Log:
  - Reword the sentence about what is X11 to make it closer to "a
    consensus of opinion" and to the reality [1]
  - Various style, grammar and punctuation fixes [1]
  - Update the name of the FreeBSD KDE team to "KDE on FreeBSD team"
    (based on http://freebsd.kde.org/)
  
  PR:             doc/114337 [1]
  Submitted by:   Ben Kaduk <minimarmot@gmail.com>
  
  Revision  Changes    Path
  1.183     +14 -14    doc/en_US.ISO8859-1/books/handbook/x11/chapter.sgml
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