Bug 32578

Comment 1 chern 2001-12-22 00:35:32 UTC

I'm not sure if I follow what you are trying to say...

(FreeBSD can) run a huge variety of applications.  This makes perfect
sense.  But these are not complete sentence, just fragments.

(FreeBSD) runs a huge variety of applications. - makes sense

As a fragment, both run and runs make sense, because they can be prefixed
with something to make it complete.

I think it's fine the way it is.

- chern

On Fri, 7 Dec 2001, Ceri wrote:

> The bulletpoint list on the home page of www.FreeBSD.org contains a list of
> some of the good points regarding FreeBSD.
>
> I believe that one of them therefore contains a grammatical error.
> Consider the implied notions :
>
> 1. (FreeBSD has) Cutting edge features
> 2. (FreeBSD has) Powerful Internet solutions
> 3. (FreeBSD can) Run a huge a variety of applications
> 4. (FreeBSD is)  Easy to install
>
> I don't like number 3.
>
> Ceri
>
> >How-To-Repeat:
> 	Visit http://www.FreeBSD.org in a browser.
> >Fix:
>
> --- www/en/index.xsl.old	Fri Dec  7 14:29:23 2001
> +++ www/en/index.xsl	Fri Dec  7 14:33:16 2001
> @@ -250,7 +250,7 @@
>  		<a href="gallery/gallery.html">gallery</a> for examples of
>  		FreeBSD powered applications and services.</p>
>
> -	      <h2><font color="#990000">Run a huge variety of
> +	      <h2><font color="#990000">Runs a huge variety of
>  		  applications</font></h2>
>
>  	      <p>The quality of FreeBSD combined with today's low-cost,
> >Release-Note:
> >Audit-Trail:
> >Unformatted:
>
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> with "unsubscribe freebsd-doc" in the body of the message
>

Comment 2 John Baldwin 2001-12-22 01:26:40 UTC

On 22-Dec-01 Chern Lee wrote:
> The following reply was made to PR docs/32578; it has been noted by GNATS.
> 
> From: Chern Lee <chern@FreeBSD.org>
> To: Ceri <setantae@submonkey.net>
> Cc: <FreeBSD-gnats-submit@FreeBSD.ORG>
> Subject: Re: docs/32578: A _really_ petty change to the front page of the
>  website
> Date: Fri, 21 Dec 2001 16:35:32 -0800 (PST)
> 
>  I'm not sure if I follow what you are trying to say...
>  
>  (FreeBSD can) run a huge variety of applications.  This makes perfect
>  sense.  But these are not complete sentence, just fragments.
>  
>  (FreeBSD) runs a huge variety of applications. - makes sense
>  
>  As a fragment, both run and runs make sense, because they can be prefixed
>  with something to make it complete.
>  
>  I think it's fine the way it is.

Hmm, I find them awkward for a different reason: 1, 2, and 4 don't start with a
verb, which is what makes this awkard.

Nevertheless, after re-reading the page, I read #3 more as the reader can use
FreeBSD to run a huge variety of applications, and for the implied you, the
verb is correct.  If there was someway to restate #3 so as not to use a verb, I
think I would prefer that, but I can't think of a clean way of doing that atm.
Well, one way might be to be explicit and say "FreeBSD has ...", "FreeBSD can
implement...", "FreeBSD can...", "FreeBSD is...".

-- 

John Baldwin <jhb@FreeBSD.org>  <><  http://www.FreeBSD.org/~jhb/
"Power Users Use the Power to Serve!"  -  http://www.FreeBSD.org/

Comment 3 Giorgos Keramidas 2002-01-23 07:06:39 UTC

State Changed
From-To: open->suspended

Since there doesn't seem to be an agreement if the front page is 
`wrong' or should be changed to something better, I'll leave this 
suspended.  If anyone has a better idea, that we can all agree with, 
you're welcome to help with this.

On Tue, Jan 22, 2002 at 11:08:27PM -0800, keramida@FreeBSD.org wrote:
> Synopsis: A _really_ petty change to the front page of the website
> 
> State-Changed-From-To: open->suspended
> 
> http://www.FreeBSD.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=32578

You're more than welcome to close it if you prefer.

Ceri

I am currently taking a quick look at this, maybe I could come up with 
something that EVERYONE can agree on to make this a bit more 
``friendly'' for users ;)


-- 
Tom (Darklogik) Rhodes
www.Pittgoth.com Gothic Liberation Front
www.FreeBSD.org  The Power To Serve

diff -ru en.old/index.xsl en/index.xsl
--- en.old/index.xsl	Tue Feb 19 15:28:13 2002
+++ en/index.xsl	Tue Feb 19 15:52:40 2002
@@ -224,7 +224,7 @@
 	
 	      <p>FreeBSD is an advanced operating system for
 		Intel ia32 compatible, DEC Alpha, and PC-98 architectures.
-		It is derived from BSD UNIX, the version of UNIX developed at 
+		It is derived from BSD UNIX, the version of UNIX developed at
 		the University of California, Berkeley.
 		It is developed and maintained by 
 		<a
@@ -233,33 +233,36 @@
 		<a href="{$base}/platforms/index.html">platforms</a> are in
 		various stages of development.</p>
 	      
-	      <h2><font color="#990000">Cutting edge features</font></h2>
+	      <h2><font color="#990000">FreeBSD has cutting edge features</font></h2>
 	      
 	      <p>FreeBSD offers advanced networking, performance, security
 		and compatibility 
 		<a href="{$base}/features.html">features</a>
 		today which are still missing in other operating systems,
 		even some of the best commercial ones.</p>
-	      
-	      <h2><font color="#990000">Powerful Internet solutions</font></h2>
+
+	      <h2><font color="#990000">Industrial strength Networking</font></h2>
 	      
 	      <p>FreeBSD makes an ideal 
 		<a href="{$base}/internet.html">Internet or Intranet</a> 
 		server. It provides robust network services under the heaviest
 		loads and uses memory efficiently to maintain good response
-		times for thousands of simultaneous user processes. Visit our
+		time for thousands of simultaneous user processes. Visit our
 		<a href="gallery/gallery.html">gallery</a> for examples of
-		FreeBSD powered applications and services.</p>
-	    
-	      <h2><font color="#990000">Run a huge variety of
-		  applications</font></h2>
+		FreeBSD powered applications, servers, networks, and other services.</p>
+
+	      <h2><font color="#990000">FreeBSD has access to hundreds of applications
+              </font></h2>
 	    
 	      <p>The quality of FreeBSD combined with today's low-cost,
 		high-speed PC hardware makes FreeBSD a very economical
 		alternative to commercial UNIX workstations.  It is well-suited
-		for a great number of both desktop and server 
-		<a href="{$base}/applications.html">applications</a>.</p>
-	    
+		for a great number of both desktop and server
+		<a href="{$base}/applications.html">applications.</a>
+                Imagine an entire developement environment
+                right at your finger tips, with support for almost all of the major
+                programming languages!.</p>
+
 	      <h2><font color="#990000">Easy to install</font></h2>
 	    
 	      <p>FreeBSD can be installed from a variety of media including

Comment 7 Tom Rhodes 2002-08-27 01:08:42 UTC

State Changed
From-To: suspended->closed

s/variety/number/ of applications.  This sounds very reasonable.