The bulletpoint list on the home page of www.FreeBSD.org contains a list of some of the good points regarding FreeBSD. I believe that one of them therefore contains a grammatical error. Consider the implied notions : 1. (FreeBSD has) Cutting edge features 2. (FreeBSD has) Powerful Internet solutions 3. (FreeBSD can) Run a huge a variety of applications 4. (FreeBSD is) Easy to install I don't like number 3. Ceri How-To-Repeat: Visit http://www.FreeBSD.org in a browser.
I'm not sure if I follow what you are trying to say... (FreeBSD can) run a huge variety of applications. This makes perfect sense. But these are not complete sentence, just fragments. (FreeBSD) runs a huge variety of applications. - makes sense As a fragment, both run and runs make sense, because they can be prefixed with something to make it complete. I think it's fine the way it is. - chern On Fri, 7 Dec 2001, Ceri wrote: > The bulletpoint list on the home page of www.FreeBSD.org contains a list of > some of the good points regarding FreeBSD. > > I believe that one of them therefore contains a grammatical error. > Consider the implied notions : > > 1. (FreeBSD has) Cutting edge features > 2. (FreeBSD has) Powerful Internet solutions > 3. (FreeBSD can) Run a huge a variety of applications > 4. (FreeBSD is) Easy to install > > I don't like number 3. > > Ceri > > >How-To-Repeat: > Visit http://www.FreeBSD.org in a browser. > >Fix: > > --- www/en/index.xsl.old Fri Dec 7 14:29:23 2001 > +++ www/en/index.xsl Fri Dec 7 14:33:16 2001 > @@ -250,7 +250,7 @@ > <a href="gallery/gallery.html">gallery</a> for examples of > FreeBSD powered applications and services.</p> > > - <h2><font color="#990000">Run a huge variety of > + <h2><font color="#990000">Runs a huge variety of > applications</font></h2> > > <p>The quality of FreeBSD combined with today's low-cost, > >Release-Note: > >Audit-Trail: > >Unformatted: > > To Unsubscribe: send mail to majordomo@FreeBSD.org > with "unsubscribe freebsd-doc" in the body of the message >
On 22-Dec-01 Chern Lee wrote: > The following reply was made to PR docs/32578; it has been noted by GNATS. > > From: Chern Lee <chern@FreeBSD.org> > To: Ceri <setantae@submonkey.net> > Cc: <FreeBSD-gnats-submit@FreeBSD.ORG> > Subject: Re: docs/32578: A _really_ petty change to the front page of the > website > Date: Fri, 21 Dec 2001 16:35:32 -0800 (PST) > > I'm not sure if I follow what you are trying to say... > > (FreeBSD can) run a huge variety of applications. This makes perfect > sense. But these are not complete sentence, just fragments. > > (FreeBSD) runs a huge variety of applications. - makes sense > > As a fragment, both run and runs make sense, because they can be prefixed > with something to make it complete. > > I think it's fine the way it is. Hmm, I find them awkward for a different reason: 1, 2, and 4 don't start with a verb, which is what makes this awkard. Nevertheless, after re-reading the page, I read #3 more as the reader can use FreeBSD to run a huge variety of applications, and for the implied you, the verb is correct. If there was someway to restate #3 so as not to use a verb, I think I would prefer that, but I can't think of a clean way of doing that atm. Well, one way might be to be explicit and say "FreeBSD has ...", "FreeBSD can implement...", "FreeBSD can...", "FreeBSD is...". -- John Baldwin <jhb@FreeBSD.org> <>< http://www.FreeBSD.org/~jhb/ "Power Users Use the Power to Serve!" - http://www.FreeBSD.org/
State Changed From-To: open->suspended Since there doesn't seem to be an agreement if the front page is `wrong' or should be changed to something better, I'll leave this suspended. If anyone has a better idea, that we can all agree with, you're welcome to help with this.
On Tue, Jan 22, 2002 at 11:08:27PM -0800, keramida@FreeBSD.org wrote: > Synopsis: A _really_ petty change to the front page of the website > > State-Changed-From-To: open->suspended > > http://www.FreeBSD.org/cgi/query-pr.cgi?pr=32578 You're more than welcome to close it if you prefer. Ceri
I am currently taking a quick look at this, maybe I could come up with something that EVERYONE can agree on to make this a bit more ``friendly'' for users ;) -- Tom (Darklogik) Rhodes www.Pittgoth.com Gothic Liberation Front www.FreeBSD.org The Power To Serve
diff -ru en.old/index.xsl en/index.xsl --- en.old/index.xsl Tue Feb 19 15:28:13 2002 +++ en/index.xsl Tue Feb 19 15:52:40 2002 @@ -224,7 +224,7 @@ <p>FreeBSD is an advanced operating system for Intel ia32 compatible, DEC Alpha, and PC-98 architectures. - It is derived from BSD UNIX, the version of UNIX developed at + It is derived from BSD UNIX, the version of UNIX developed at the University of California, Berkeley. It is developed and maintained by <a @@ -233,33 +233,36 @@ <a href="{$base}/platforms/index.html">platforms</a> are in various stages of development.</p> - <h2><font color="#990000">Cutting edge features</font></h2> + <h2><font color="#990000">FreeBSD has cutting edge features</font></h2> <p>FreeBSD offers advanced networking, performance, security and compatibility <a href="{$base}/features.html">features</a> today which are still missing in other operating systems, even some of the best commercial ones.</p> - - <h2><font color="#990000">Powerful Internet solutions</font></h2> + + <h2><font color="#990000">Industrial strength Networking</font></h2> <p>FreeBSD makes an ideal <a href="{$base}/internet.html">Internet or Intranet</a> server. It provides robust network services under the heaviest loads and uses memory efficiently to maintain good response - times for thousands of simultaneous user processes. Visit our + time for thousands of simultaneous user processes. Visit our <a href="gallery/gallery.html">gallery</a> for examples of - FreeBSD powered applications and services.</p> - - <h2><font color="#990000">Run a huge variety of - applications</font></h2> + FreeBSD powered applications, servers, networks, and other services.</p> + + <h2><font color="#990000">FreeBSD has access to hundreds of applications + </font></h2> <p>The quality of FreeBSD combined with today's low-cost, high-speed PC hardware makes FreeBSD a very economical alternative to commercial UNIX workstations. It is well-suited - for a great number of both desktop and server - <a href="{$base}/applications.html">applications</a>.</p> - + for a great number of both desktop and server + <a href="{$base}/applications.html">applications.</a> + Imagine an entire developement environment + right at your finger tips, with support for almost all of the major + programming languages!.</p> + <h2><font color="#990000">Easy to install</font></h2> <p>FreeBSD can be installed from a variety of media including
State Changed From-To: suspended->closed s/variety/number/ of applications. This sounds very reasonable.